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Prologue

A Beginning

I was running across the rooftops. A jump, one more. Each flat rooftop passed me by as I ran as fast as I could. I was in danger and I knew it. I shouldn't have left the streets, shouldn't have looked for solace in the quiet rooftops.

Giant air conditioners exuded from those rooftops. Even as I sped past them by I heard their incessant humming despite the cool autumn breeze. Clouds covering the sky ominously hid the moon, showing nothing more than a pale glow. It was enough for me to see by.

Even though I couldn't hear their footsteps anywhere near I knew they were following me. Like when you sense someone watching you. Not just anyone.

He was chasing me, I could feel his presence. The threat, the tension. For a moment I wondered if he was alone, playing with the notion I could take him on.

Dream on.

He was far stronger and faster than I was. Perhaps even more intelligent. I couldn't really outrun him, fight him or escape. Anything short from jumping on a moving train probably... No! I shook my head. Bad idea.

Another jump, landing slightly awkward but running on. I was still looking around for a way out. All of this just because they wanted me to drink longer, deeper. Until that final drop. I refused, from first I was turned I refused. A drink was enough, a drought not needed. 'We need not kill' It was a lesson I held most dear. Sometimes I still wondered about it all, how it began. How I came to be this...

Yes, I drink blood now. I drink blood to survive. I have no choice. But I do not kill, I never take more than I need.

I still live!

Comments

Nimja
4 years ago
My first chapter - Well, this is where it started. I wonder where it will go.
Richard Q
4 years ago
Chapter 0 - To introduce a character and theme in such a short and punchy prose is a skill. The pace is fast and gripping and it left me wanting your next chapter!
A.
4 years ago
diffi-cult words - I would need more patience to look up the new English words.
Nimja
4 years ago
Words - Not that many difficult words in it I thought? But this first one is more word-full on purpose. It's the start.

The kickoff...
A.
4 years ago
Okay
lineke
4 years ago
the beginning of it all - well, my first look at your story.
It catches me so I will read more, hopefully you won't expect me to write comment on every chapter :P
curious about the rest...
Nimja
4 years ago
Hey! - Nice to see you here Linsel ;)
Simon
4 years ago
The beginning - Came over from MU.

A decent introduction, getting ppl intrested and diving directly into the story. Just a little too ambitious in my opinion.

Still going to read on.
Nimja
4 years ago
Ambitious? - That's an interesting take. I hope I manage to fulfill your expectations then. ^_^
Dani
4 years ago
sorta sounds like fanfiction. i wouldn't have stayed if it were not for the fact it is in the top ten on pages unbound site.

i'm a lazy monkey those ratings tend to be a good measure of the tastiness of a story.

i'm just starting to read your story. Cheers to a good one!
Nimja
4 years ago
Small edit - I changed the end slightly to make it more obvious it is NOT fan-fiction.
Stormy
4 years ago
#0 - This is short, wonderfully written, a great introduction and a great first chapter.

Consider me hooked and heading to #1.
Nanyque
3 years ago
Illustrations!! - What a great idea! I love them (the 3 that you have;) )
Nimja
3 years ago
Try - But it will take me a LOOOONG time to get them all done.

I hope people like them.
lineke
3 years ago
jee - very nice!
you're gonna do all of them????!!!
succes!
Nimja
3 years ago
Not anymore - The graphics stuff has been put on hold indefinitely for now.

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